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The boy rushes towards the streets,
Sprinting, leaping, half-stepping
Towards the midnight finale lights ahead.
He is breathless, chasing a wind that
Has roped his neck and is daring him to move
Faster. But he is careful; afraid that he
Might slip on the road that leads him to
The light. But when he reaches it, he forgets;
Stunned by the checkerboard floors stained,
Soaked with champagne and starlight.
The swan and peacock laced patrons rising
With the smoke of their cigars, he
Races forth to join them, and forgets
Not to slip on the tile.
Rushing Towards Tile
Hey guys. The Wayword Writer back with a bit of poetry while I'm still editing my next short story (and working on yet another one, as well). I'm sorry that I can't keep you guys supplied with a fairly steady load of stories, but have this to ponder while I'm predisposed. So many of us are desperate to reach some land of riches, fame, wondrous food and raucous applause so loud that we cannot hear ourselves clapping along. But, do we forget why or how we got there, if we ever do? Do we remind ourselves to be prudent and appropriate where class and accomplishments are all the famous tend to have? Be wary of the golden castles and tile floors, darlings. I hear they're fairly slick...
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Yes, I'm a day late. Yes, I'm lazy. YES, I'm being unnecessarily contrary by posting this a day later than everybody else and, in doing so, I attract hipsters. But that's something to be argued a different day. For now, a new year is upon us! Possibilities to ruin our liv- wait, wrong direction. What I meant to say was that possibilities to enhance our lives are upon us! Stories, and worlds, and movies! Words and wanderings, drinks and decadence! The wind is rising! We must try to live! Take flight, even if it is but a flutter. I know that I myself failed to reach the heights I demanded of myself the year prior, but I must seek the warm winds once more. Others will walk towards the cold waters, and some to tread and scatter the earth, plucking up the colors within its cracks and sharing it with its brothers and sisters! For now, I rest, and shall awake tomorrow to begin a transfer of a draft, which I will send off to someone to edit. For now, this is The Wayword Wrier saying, how do you measure a year?

In word counts, in book sales?
In panic or hapless fury?
In beer cans? Bottles?
In final success?

In 525,600 minutes, how do you measure a walk towards the rest?
Another Christmas gone? Hello, everyone, the Wayword Writer back with a customary Christmas journal because I finally had something I could write about! Unfortunately, it's sappy, so I'll apologize in advance (sorry). If there's one character that's appeared in stories that I always find myself mirroring, it's Charlie from The Perks of Being a Wallflower. Socially awkward, observant, and... lonely. And this may be because my social standards are too high or I'm nervous about embarrassing myself due to past social... incidents, but I'm trying to get better. I know writers aren't meant o be social people, but one gains information, most commonly, via word of mouth, and i'm trying to learn about people that are different. That aren't from small towns, that weren't on the football or soccer team. That have military parents and did crazy things in high school, or at least are freaking serious about writing. I guess what I'm trying to say is that I want to participate, but I don't really know how. So, my Christmas question to all of you is how do you participate? And have you read or seen The Perks of Being a Wallflower? 'Cause if you haven't, DO IT. NOW.

MERRY FREAKING CHRISTMAS, EVERYBODY! Now get the kegs ready. We've got less than week till the skies are reset and we blow the freaking roof off the stratosphere.
Hey, you guys. It's The Wayword Writer again and I know it's been a while. First off, no, I did not complete NaNoWriMo. I only made it about two chapters into the novel, but I plan to get back to it. I'll likely start again at the start of January, and start a month-by-month schedule where I work on the novel for one month and then transfer to short stories and other projects I want to get to. At least that's how it's supposed to go. But more importantly, I want to show you all something. Now, as a writer, I'm always looking to get published. This means that the writing that I produce will end up getting sent to journals or publicists or people that just like posting good writing and, if I'm that good and just a little bit lucky, I'll end up with my work in the (more) public view. What I want to show you guys is a comment an editor from Polyphony HS gave me after review The Walkman. This is incredibly important, mainly because editors don't give feedback on work they consider for publication. And I really wanted you guys to see this. So, here it is. The general gist of it, at least.

Thank you for submitting to Polyphony HS! This was a very unique poem, I’m certain I’ve never seen this topic before and your use of paragraphs to tell the poem in a story like pattern is uncommon for poems. You had some beautiful descriptions and metaphors in here— my favorites being the lines about the Walkman’s footsteps and hair. However I do have a few problems with this poem. Firstly- it feels like two poems. You start off on a really interesting note about how a dancer is fluid but not water, and it’s beautiful but seems to have nothing to do with the next part of your poem about the Walkman. You sort of connect the two by saying dancers aren’t water but the Walkman is and this brings me to my second problem: you never explain why the Walkman is like water. You spend a third of your poem leading up to something you never address. To be honest, I think the poem would work better without the first stanza. I would suggest either working the topic of water and fluidness into the stanzas about the Walkman, or replacing the first stanza one about the Walkman. Perhaps you could start with a question like: “Who is the Walkman?” Then immediately progressing into, “He isn’t made of wiring…” Other than this topic shift, I found your poem well-written and intriguing, keep writing and submitting!

I wanted to point this out because of one line in particular. The very second and very last line of the entire review. Words like unique and intriguing get tossed around, and it's what makes me feel even more special when I read it. Not only do I know that I'm doing what I want to do, but I'm being taught how to do it better. That's what feedback is all about. I like to compliments and the "nice jobs", but nice can only go so far. I want to be different, revolutionary. I want to know what it's like to be able to not know what a boundary line or border is, and be able to effectively put anything into a story in such a way that it seems to enhance it because of how foreign the concept is, rather than detract from the narrative and setting because how random it's inclusion seems. So, talk to me, people. Or give me suggestions on how I can talk to you. I'll have a short story for all of you within the next to weeks, hopefully. But for now, this is The Wayword Writer saying that FINALS. FUCKING. BLOW.

P.S: Thanks for the 5000 views, you guys. Let's try and double that number.
Hello, everyone. It's me again with a bit of a warning. Not necessarily an excuse, but an explanation. I'm currently working on my first novel (the first chapter is almost complete), and I haven't had the time and concentration required to work on anything else. If anything, I'll likely work on other projects on the weekends when I don't have any classes to swallow up the majority of my day. So, just giving you all fair disclosure on why I may not be so active around the site. Let's hope that this thing gets done soon, and with ample quality to spare.

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Yes, I'm a day late. Yes, I'm lazy. YES, I'm being unnecessarily contrary by posting this a day later than everybody else and, in doing so, I attract hipsters. But that's something to be argued a different day. For now, a new year is upon us! Possibilities to ruin our liv- wait, wrong direction. What I meant to say was that possibilities to enhance our lives are upon us! Stories, and worlds, and movies! Words and wanderings, drinks and decadence! The wind is rising! We must try to live! Take flight, even if it is but a flutter. I know that I myself failed to reach the heights I demanded of myself the year prior, but I must seek the warm winds once more. Others will walk towards the cold waters, and some to tread and scatter the earth, plucking up the colors within its cracks and sharing it with its brothers and sisters! For now, I rest, and shall awake tomorrow to begin a transfer of a draft, which I will send off to someone to edit. For now, this is The Wayword Wrier saying, how do you measure a year?

In word counts, in book sales?
In panic or hapless fury?
In beer cans? Bottles?
In final success?

In 525,600 minutes, how do you measure a walk towards the rest?

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Ryan Adams
Artist | Student | Literature
United States
A slightly less clever man than a clever man, I'm just the writer trying to writer himself, first off, a good bio, and second off, a place in the history books. Give a lexicon and I will weave for you tales that will sing aria's of imagination and stardust. You wanna ride with me? You best be ready to surf the winds because my head's in the cloud's an the only time when it lands is when I go to dream, baby. If you think you can handle that, then climb on board and set your compass to wherever you so please.

To those of you who wish to contact me, my email addresses can be found as such.

My social: aredmcguffin@gmail.com

My professional: ryan.adams.writer@gmail.com
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GoldenNocturna Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2015  Student Writer
Thanks for the fave! I hope my tutorial helps.
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AnUnfoldedPaperTiger Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2015  Student Writer
Ah, no problem. I'm always trying to make sure that I'm showing rather than telling, so having a guide helps.
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GoldenNocturna Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2015  Student Writer
:)
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VFreie Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2014
Hi, and welcome to :iconthewrittenrevolution: theWrittenRevolution!
There are lots of things you can get involved in:

Bullet; Red we post monthly writing prompts (that include prizes, and a chat event during the month to help people with their pieces),

Bullet; Black publishing opportunities from other sites (whenever we come across one!),

Bullet; White we have a monthly feature that includes a deserving member, two of the best critiques we've seen during the month, and two helpful writing resources,

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Bullet; Black and a biweekly-ish article in which one of our admins gives an in-depth critique to one of our members' work that hasn't received much feedback.


We'll soon be reviving our chatroom with weekly activities, so stay tuned for that too. :D (Big Grin)

We also have Facebook and Twitter accounts. On our profile page you will find links to the latest of all the activities I listed up here and to our social networks that will help you keep updated, so feel free to look around and ask if you have any questions, we're here to help!

Welcome to the revolution. I salute you!
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Mulluane Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2014
Thanks for the fav!
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AnUnfoldedPaperTiger Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2014  Student Writer
Oh, it's nothing.
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wintersoul2468 Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2014  Student General Artist
Thanks for the fave :D
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AnUnfoldedPaperTiger Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2014  Student Writer
Ah, it's nothing.
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wintersoul2468 Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2014  Student General Artist
It's not nothing. Seriously thank you. I really appreciate it :)
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AnUnfoldedPaperTiger Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2014  Student Writer
Then you're welcome. What all did you like about the piece, anyway?
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